White Rabbit

It seems prolonged, and without enough emotion or angst to keep one occupied.

I like that you're expressing something deep in a destructive way.

I like this a lot! It just speaks clearly. I loved "we're all just china dolls".

I disagree, I feel that the unique rhyming style flowed wonderfully throughout the poem. This flow gave the poem a certain melody that's hard to attain without effort. It expresses ...

Beggining was good, and creepy. The middle seemed to suggest laboar, or sodomy(Not sure). The end more suggests laboar, but hey. These dilemas make it hard for me to get ...

I like the discease idea (BUT) I can't tell what your talking about. Other than that, not too shabby.

Good story, I can agree with the others about the rythim(no biggy). Howwever it does remind me a lot of "Dope Hat" by Marilyn Manson. Any relation?

I like this a lot, it's very expressive.

Very well spoken. It says plenty about your thoughts on slavery. I like the idea of this poem.

Ooo... creepy. This was a nice little piece. Nitpicks: "It’s no concern of your’ mother’s" should be "It’s no concern of your mother’s" and "she chopped off it's head" should ...

I LOVE this statement, and the title with the poem works famously.

Respectable, yet it feels a little un-original.

I felt like this might be a Kingdom Hearts, although I still got that glossy Anime feeling.